Plan outline for a new religion: Do you guys think this would work, spiritually speaking of course?

invisible know it all man created dirt man, then he created a woman from the rib of dirt man, then dirt mann and rib woman decided to eat fruit from a tree of knowledge so invisible know it all man got all pissed off at dirt man and rib woman and threw them out of his back yard. later, invisible know it all man told his favorite progeny of dirtman and rib woman ,Floating barn building man to build a big fat boat cause invisible know it all man was mad at yucky butt banging peoples in soda’um and gonnoreah, the naughty cities, and invisible know it all man wanted to save a few of the barnyard creatures cause he forgot how to a make new ones. This big flood kilt everyone but floating barn building man and his family and a few animals that invisible know it all man forgot how to make. They all had a bunch of babies that later grew up to make invisible know it all man angry AGAIN, so this time invisible know it al man sent Zombie man (invisible know it all man’s son) to be tortured and killed to save dirt man and rib woman’s progeny from being sent to red man with horns by invisible know it all man..

Now if you accept zombie man’s sacrifice, then you will be living under grace and you get to go hang out with invisible know it all man in the sky and grovel for a zillion years, every single day forever and ever, and some days you get to go look down at the fire lakey place where all the bad dirt men and rib women are with red man with horns and laugh at them .
I am trying to tighten up this story so as many people as possible will beleie it and join teh religion so I can make tons and tons of money..
So if you have any suggestions on how I could improve upon it, please feel free.